Hi everyone welcome back to my blog,
I'm going to share my hotspot with you. For hotspot we have been been learning to:
Use strong ideas when writing.
Eliminate unnecessary ideas and words.
Only include what is powerful, meaningful and important.
All our story have to start with "No, no, no!" I was sliding back into the dream. I have not finished my story yet.
This is my one
"No, no, no!" I was sliding back into the dream. “Where am I and why it’s it so dark and whats that rotting smell and that screeching sound?” The rotting smell and the screeching sound was behind me. I looked behind and I saw a outline of someone. “Hello who’s there?” The person started to slowly walking towards me. Has feet was making a screeching sound and the closer he went to me the more I could smell that rotting smell. Finally he was close enough to see has face.
That's all good bye. But before you go can you give me feedback to make this better? and also can you tall people that you know to read this blog and leave a comment?
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