Hotspot T4

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I'm going to share my term 4 week 1 hotspot. For hotspot this week we have to make this sentence: My shoes were soaked and the rain wouldn’t stop. A grey car I didn’t recognize pulled up beside me into a 100 word paragraph or something close to that.

Also this is what we are learning to do:

• Use strong ideas when writing.
• Eliminate unnecessary ideas and words.
• Only include what is powerful, meaningful and important.

This is my one



This sucks, my shoes was soaked and it was pouring. As I ran to my school a gary van screeched and stop by me. The man in the gary van looked like he was disillusioned. “get in the van you’ll catch a cold” he said with a phony smile.
I replied “no need am Already near my school but I thank you anyway”
He said again “get in”
I replied “no” 

then a man came out of the van. He started to walk towards me. I stepped backwards but then I slipped on a Banana peel and kicked him in the place I don’t want to think about. The man dropped on the ground like a bag full of rocks. I got up and ran to school.

 

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maths

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Am going tell you what we are learning for math. WALT change fractions to decimals. For week one we had to work out five questions that our teacher made. After we work out our teacher questions we make 3 of our own questions. We have to put all the date of the teacher's questions and my questions in a google drawing.  I didn't put the answer of my questions in this drawing so you can try and work them out. Here is a my teacher's video that tells you how to work out this kind of questions.

This is my google drawing



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