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Tuesday, 26 February 2019

Hotspot Writing

Hi everyone

I'm going to share my hotspot writing  with you. This is just for today. I hope you enjoy it.

This is my one

A Dream
“Mum do I have to go to sleep” I said.
“Yes you do have to” mum said. I went on my bed and Starting to go to sleep. I heard something I open my eyes “oh my goodness” I said I saw something on my bedroom wall. It’s eyes was red and it’s Skin was all black. I got out of my bed and ran to my mum and dad room. I tried to open the door but it was lock I went to the door to go outside but it was lock. I grabbed my baseball bat and hit the window but it didn't crack. I looked behind me It was right there. Then I wake up I was sweating a lot I could not move for minutes.

Can you give me some feedback?
 
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1 comment:

  1. Aaron27 February 2019 at 14:52

    Hi Ken, your story is awesome. It has some good words and it is interesting. You've used some speech mark if somebody is talking. I made a scary story before.

    From Aaron

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